Story Chat: As Far as a Prisoner Can Go

Last week’s prompt at Charli Mills’ Carrot Ranch was to rewrite a story in 99 words (no more, no less) based on the short story, As Far as a Prisoner Can Go, which Charli wrote for Story Chat. The Word Wranglers were to write the same story, but different. She indicated we could change genre, wreck it, etc.

This pedometer geek writer really changed it up, really wrecked it, and it is as follows:

Escape from a Prison

The invasion began with bombs and gunfire. Oksana and her husband Andriy were hiding out. Andriy was obligated to serve, but he insisted she must go.

Escaping the prison of a bomb shelter, Oksana made the last train out of Kyiv, knowing she was leaving behind Andriy to fight, perhaps die.    

The train only went so far; she would need to walk miles toward a new world. Along the way, Oksana found a young child crying and clinging to his dead parents.

Oksana picked up the boy, calling him Matviy, making him her own as they continued toward safety.

~Nancy Brady, 2022

All the names used in this story are Ukrainian and the names were picked for their meanings.

To read Charli’s short story and read all the other stories by the Word Wranglers as well as the feedback, check out https://alwayswrite.blog/2022/05/10/may-story-chat-as-far-as-a-former-prisoner-can-go

About pedometergeek

A pharmacist by profession, a haiku poet by nature, I read and write. I have a book of haiku, Ohayo Haiku, and another somewhat alternative haiku book, Three Breaths, but write other genres. I also read...lots of novels! My favorite is, and remains, Ayn Rand's Atlas Shrugged but I am also a big Harry Potter fan. I truly am a pedometer geek strapping on my pedometer as soon as I awaken.
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15 Responses to Story Chat: As Far as a Prisoner Can Go

  1. JC home says:

    Very nicely done. Nice imagery too.

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  2. Yes, Charli’s story is very different than mine, and hers was very touching and definitely hopeful.

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  3. Norah says:

    Well done, Nan. I like the way you tied this in with current events. Another very tragic event.

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    • Thanks, Norah, it was a twist on Charli’s story with basically all the elements. The Ukrainian situation distresses me to no end. I took some of my collage paper and made a Ukrainian flag for our front window. One of our daughters-in-law has Ukranian grandparents so it is something close to our hearts.

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      • Norah says:

        I understand why it is close to your hearts, having a family member. But, in reality, we are all members of one big family and there is a lot of hurt in this family at the moment. Take care. 🙂

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  4. Jules says:

    Oh… would you tell us the meaning of the names?

    Here’s a good news story. A family that was trying to have a child used a surrogate mother – then the woman also concieved. Two babies, sibling born within hours in different states!

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    • Jules, Oksana means hospitality, Andriy (Andrew) means man and warrior, and Matviy (Matthew) means gift of God, and each live up to their names.

      That story about the siblings, that is awesome. From none to “twins,” wow! I hadn’t heard about the story and I am glad you brought it to my attention.

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  5. Marsha says:

    This is one of the most touching stories. Humans have so much capacity for love and compassion. If only we lived that way every day.

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  6. Pingback: May Story Chat Summary – Marsha Ingrao – Always Write

  7. Norah, even if there was no direction connection, I feel the same way. In fact, until this atrocity of an invasion occurred, I was not aware of her family’s roots in Ukraine. I just knew it is wrong, and that the people of Ukraine do not deserve any of it (the invasion, the loss of life, etc.). As you say, we are all one huge family. ~nan

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