Carrot Ranch: 99 Word Flash Fiction

Rose’s Valuables

Rose packed her bag as she was told. Underwear, socks, dresses, and, of course, her teddy bear Samuel, who knew everything. Sam listened, comforted, and kept secrets. Samuel was her best friend.

Her parents and Rose walked to the train station; she carried her whole world in that suitcase.

The men made Rose put her suitcase with the others. β€œThey’ll be on the train,” they said, herding everyone into train cars.

As the train pulled away, Rose saw all the suitcases still on the platform. Her little suitcase was dumped, contents rifled, and the bear tossed onto the bonfire.

This flash fiction was based upon this week’s prompt at Carrot Ranch: a suitcase left. For more 99 word, (no more, no less), flash fictions, check out https://carrotranch.com/blog/

About pedometergeek

A pharmacist by profession, a haiku poet by nature, I read and write. I have a book of haiku, Ohayo Haiku, and another somewhat alternative haiku book, Three Breaths, but write other genres. I also read...lots of novels! My favorite is, and remains, Ayn Rand's Atlas Shrugged but I am also a big Harry Potter fan. I truly am a pedometer geek strapping on my pedometer as soon as I awaken.
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7 Responses to Carrot Ranch: 99 Word Flash Fiction

  1. I love, “…and…her teddy bear, Samuel, who knew everything.” Oh, my, what a wonderful image! Poor Rose! πŸ˜‰ More, please!

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  2. Coming from you, dear Barbara, I am humbled by the compliment. Thank you. It was difficult to only write 99 words. My first draft was nearly twice that as the story flowed and could have been expanded so much. I had to cut and cut and was afraid it would lose any meaning.

    The story could, unfortunately, happen in any age, and sadly, it has…all too many times. Lest we forget.

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  3. Jules says:

    This reminds me of both past and present history where possessions are separated unfairly from those who were promised better. Definitely pulling heart strings with your words.

    I wrote of a talking valise… here: Recycled

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  4. Charli Mills says:

    You distilled a powerful flash, Nancy. Every action, every word carried meaning that drives the emotional tension in your story. Well done!

    Liked by 1 person

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